Wednesday, March 30, 2016

My Argument

For writing we have been learning to write an argument using the writing process. The topic was “Are Devices Taking Over Our Lives”.

Something I did really well in my writing was… That i had a lot of ideas so i could expand one idea and link them together and i have highlighted some words that are better than saying AND.

Here is a section of my writing that shows this.

Another reason is, That kids spend 53 hours a week on devices and are spending more time on devices than adults are at work YIKES!!, but that is going to increase when kids are at High school which means that they will have more work to do at High school.  It should be that adults are spending more time on devices than kids but kids spend more time on devices. NOT GOOD!,  For  instance, Kids should only be doing homework on devices not games,
Personally  I think, that the more devices we buy the more stores make so we should stop buying devices so stores stop making them.

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