Tuesday, May 24, 2016

My Short Story

I have been focusing on my vocabulary and punctuation. I have been learning to Use a range of precise vocabulary to communicate meaning (Year ⅞) use all basic punctuation independently and attempt more complex punctuation (e.g semicolons, colons, parentheses) (Year 7/8).

The pieces of my writing that are highlighted green are where I have shown my vocabulary and punctuation goal.

My Story...
                               Windy Wellington
                                  By: Amelia
Nervous, excited,scared,it’s Rebecca’s first day of her tour guiding job.

BANG!! …… One day there was a 17 year old girl named Rebecca, she is a teenager who loves to go for a walk in the forest, she has just started a job as a tour guide, guiding people in and around the forest in Wellington. She is very kind to others and she loves to meet other people. Rebecca lives in Wellington with her parents and younger sister ( Molly). This will be Rebecca's first time guiding people in and around the forest. Rebecca loves to get involved in everything that she can, Rebecca’s best friends are Brooklyn and Gemma who are also tour guide’s.

On the first day of her tour guiding job she found a new friend, her name was Talia and she ended up being Rebecca’s best friend. On the second day of her job she had to tour two Adults and two kids and Rebecca loved guiding them because they were very kind, they loved Rebecca guiding them because she was very descriptive in what she was saying about the forest.

On the third day she took one of her groups on the tour and since it is in Wellington it means that it is very windy and then they heard a BANG!! (and it was one of the big tree’s that feel over from the wind), so they were stuck and they were walking on sinking sand so they sunk and ended up in this very dark cave.

They were walking for 30 mins in the cave and came to this mysterious door, Rebecca tried to push the door but it started creaking so Rebecca tried again and again , on the third time she tried to push the door she fell through the door then they see this big open  space ……“LOOK!!! this is where me and my friends have lunch”. Rebecca explained..

After that, the three children and the three parents who were in the group that Rebecca was guiding they got invited to have lunch with Rebecca and the team because of what happened , because the team felt sorry for what happened , They were very pleased that they got invited and they all had a lovely afternoon having their lunch all together.

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